Yellow+Group's+DRAFT+2

This page is for the second draft of Yellow Group's essay.

Please look at the comments I made on your outline and rewrite (revise) your essay. Can you imagine people could get their bachelor’s degree or master’s diploma without any classrooms or classmates in the future? All schools in the US have decided to switch from the traditional face-face model of classroom learning to a new futuristic model of learning. There will be no campus or school buildings. Should the unexpected new learning model take place of the experienced historical face to face traditional educational system? Of course not and there are three reasons explain why traditional campus is better than the new one. The first reason of traditional class can not be replaced by online classes is that students need to interact in the class. In other words, if students only use the computer instead of traditional classes to study, they may lost many opportunities to communicate with their teachers and classmates. For instance, not only does the professor give the lecture in front of the class, but also the professor could answer the students’ questions face to face. In addition, the students can have group discussion with their classmates. For students, it’s very important to communicate and share their own ideas with each other. Consequently, campus must help students improve their efficiency in study. The second reason of traditional class can not be replaced by online classes is that the traditional campus would help teacher increase their experience. Face to face class and lecture provides teachers’ great opportunities learn more their students. For example, while an experienced teacher is giving a lecture, he or she probably could receive students’ reaction whatever on facial expression or eyes contact immediately. After that, the teacher might find out which part of the lecture is difficult for students to understand. This kind of special interaction between teacher and students may help the teacher raise the experience as soon as possible. Furthermore, it may improve the teaching quality. Opponents of traditional campus system say that the new futuristic model might help government save money, since the city may not need to build buildings for campus. This point has some merit on surface. However, it is certainly a short-eye opinion which doesn’t see the profits that the traditional campus might give the society in the future. If there is no traditional campus; it must shake the stabilization of society. No campus will lead the decrease of employment. For instance, it was true that without campus there is no need of any buildings, however, at the same time, without campus there is no necessity of any workers or staff at the same time. When the futuristic model established instead of traditional campus, the employment will decrease. In short, people would lose their jobs. The exchange of school system couldn’t bring benefits to society, unexpected it must make ** the society unstable. ** In conclusion, it is difficult to imagine getting a bachelor’s degree or master’s diploma without any classrooms or classmates. The US must not change the educational system from traditional class to online classes. The practiced traditional learning system should not be switched by the on line learning model. Comparisons show that the traditional campus might not give students and teachers good circumstance but also provide society stable conditions. 
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