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 Traditional Education Learning Can you imagine that only 2 % of the city population works in schools and universities? Education system has been controversial issue for a long time. The governments are thinking to switch the learning system from the classic style to online style. Most of people believe that classroom learning is the best way to learn. In fact, classic learning style can possibly make the student more comfortable and relatable. We chose traditional way because it is better for three reasons: student life, community benefits and government revenues. First is about student life; student Life on a university or college campus is a unique experience. The universities give such a high quality of learning that encourages students to work hard on understanding their subject. This education will prepare students for knowing the knowledge of facing the changing world with great confidence. In university students can find friendly people to be friends. Also, friendly people can make classic learning a great educational destination of the entire world, and they can learn many things from them, they can ask them questions if they want, and to know about other people culture. In university campus there is beautiful natural surroundings. For example, great weather, large trees and secure. These three reasons can affect the way of the student life.  Second, classroom learning offers many jobs opportunities for community especially for people whose major aren’t connected with education. For example, salesman in a food court on campus, so when we open classroom we support these people for their life. In addition, we can use these classes to improve patriotism and teach them the responsibility that they should do it for their country such as: donate for working in the army. These are some of benefits that the community gets it. Opponents say that on-line learning may save the government money because they don’t have to build schools. This idea has some great values. However, government of the state will certainly increase revenues. For instance, income tax will not be charged only for the people who are specialized in teaching the students such as, admission office employees, security. Moreover, international students pay high tuition. In fact, international students’ tuition is higher than the residence. Also, how they are living such as, renting houses, paying bills, and using transportation will be profitable to the government revenues. In sum, these reasons are really beneficial for a positive way to the government. In conclusion, there are many benefits for learning in classrooms, it makes the student to be educated better and this way of learning will prepare us to challenge the change of the new world style with a great confidence, and this is one of the ways which can increase jobs opportunities. Also, it can possibly increase the government revenues in many ways. I think the classical education system in universities will continue in U.S and will not be changed.

