Yellow+Group's+Argumentative+Essay

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To Type in Essay: 1) CLICK ON EDIT (-upper right.) 2) TYPE IN YOUR ESSAY (Follow the outline-below- that Alyx has given you.) 3) CLICK ON SAVE (-right side on toolbar above.) = = = = = = =Introduction:= ===Hook: Can you imagine people could get their bachelor’s degree or master’s diploma without any classrooms or classmates in the future? === = = State the issue-EX: In fact, today this question is being asked in the US. The issue is online learning.

===Connecting Information: All schools in the US have decided to switch from the traditional face-face model of classroom learning to a new futuristic model of learning. There will be no campus or school buildings any more. === = =

===Thesis Statement: Should the unexpected new learning model take place of the experienced historical face to face traditional educational system? Of course not and there are three reasons explain why traditional campus is better than the new one. ===

=Body Paragraph 1:= ===Topic Sentence (TS1=Reason 1): The first reason of/ that traditional classes cannot be replaced by online classes is that students need to interact in the class. ===

===Explain Controlling Idea (Reason 1): In other words, if students only use the computer instead of traditional classes to study, they may lost many opportunities to communicate with their teachers and classmates. ===

===Give Example: For instance, not only does the professor give the lecture in front of the class, but also the professor could answer the students’ questions face to face. In addition, the students can have group discussion with their classmates. ===

= = = = =Body Paragraph 2:= ===Topic Sentence (TS2=Reason 2): The second reason of/ that traditional classes cannot be replaced by online classes is that............ === === Second, the traditional campus would help teacher increase their experience. ===

===Explain Controlling Idea (Reason 2): <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">Face to face class and lecture provides teachers’ great opportunities learn more their students. ===

===Give Example: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">For example, while an experienced teacher is giving a lecture, he or she probably could receive students’ reaction whatever on facial expression or eyes contact immediately. After that, the teacher might find out which part of the lecture is difficult for students to understand. ===

===Why is this idea important? <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;"> This kind of special interaction between teacher and students may help the teacher raise the experience as soon as possible. Furthermore, it may improve the teaching quality. ===

=Body Paragraph 3:= ===Counterargument: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">Opponents of traditional campus system say that the new futuristic model might help government save money, since the city may not need to build buildings for campus. ===

===Concession: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">This point has some merit on surface. <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">However, it is certainly a short-eye opinion which doesn’t see the profits that the traditional campus might give the society in the future. ===

===Refutation: (TS3=Reason 3) <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">If there is no traditional campus; it must shake the stabilization of society. ===

===Explain Controlling Idea: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">No campus will lead the decrease of employment. For instance, it is true that without campus there is no need of any buildings, ; however, <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; msoansilanguage: EN-US; msobidilanguage: AR-SA; msofareastfontfamily: 宋体; msofareastlanguage: ZH-CN; msofontkerning: 1.0pt;">at the same, <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;"> without campus there is no necessity of any workers or staff (at the same time)move to front connection. ===

===Give Example: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">When the futuristic model established instead of traditional campus, the employment will decrease.<span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">In short, people would lose their jobs. ===

Why is this idea important? The exchange of school system couldn’t bring benefits to society, unexpected it must make <span style="font-family: 宋体;">the society unstable.
=Conclusion:= ===Signal Conclusion with Transition Word or Phrase: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">In conclusion, <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; msoansilanguage: EN-US; msobidilanguage: AR-SA; msofareastfontfamily: 宋体; msofareastlanguage: ZH-CN; msofontkerning: 1.0pt;"> there are many well-documented benefits to maintaining traditional face-face learning system.---delete this information because you did not discuss any documented benefits in your essayyou only gave your opinion. ===

===Revisit Hook: <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">Could you fancy finish your university life without classmates or classrooms?---Don't "restate" the hookInstead,answer the question you asked inthe hook-EX: "It is difficult to imagine <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; msoansilanguage: EN-US; msobidilanguage: AR-SA; msofareastfontfamily: 宋体; msofareastlanguage: ZH-CN; msofontkerning: 1.0pt;">getting a bachelor’s degree or master’s diploma without any classrooms or classmates." ===

===Restate Thesis: <span style="color: green; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 12pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt;">The practiced traditional learning system should not be switched by the on line learning model. ===