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Chloe Chai-Chien Elina Yoko Grammar/Writing 3 12 / 06 /2009  The Advantages of Face-to-face Education  Can you image learning from a computer without a teacher or classmate? In the recent years, many parents tend to let their children study online instead of learning face to face. This education system, however, will make students lose something which they ought to learn. I think learning face to face is better than studying online because of three reasons. : Learning cooperation, keeping motivation, and in-depth study ing .  The first of all, face-to-face education is a better system than online learning because it helps students to learn cooperation with others. Working together is more difficult than we think it would be. Students can learn not only how to work together, but also how to show respect to other students’ opinions. It can help them to develop a responsibility and respectful attitude during working with classmate. Learning friendship in class is helpful to connect to other people .  The second, students can keep motivation for studying  on face to face education, because they have chances to compet e  with their friends ,  and get <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">encourage from teacher <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">s. Competitions with other students and g <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">ood advices <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">from <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> teachers will be good stimulation <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">s <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">for <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> their motivation. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">W <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">hen students have some assignment or test, they study hard to win their competitor. Studying with friends and teachers in school makes students enthusiastic about their schoolwork. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA; msobidifontweight: bold; msofareastlanguage: JA; msotabcount: 1;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">Opponents of face <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">to <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">face education <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">say <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">that online learning <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">may <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">help the students because <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">they don’t need go to school, it saves a lot of time <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">. This point has some truth. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">However, <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">saving time is not so important than study <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">ing at school <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">, because <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">face to face education <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">helps students have a more in-depth studying experience <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;">For example, students have to concentrate on lectures or discussion at classroom, on the other hand, they are easily <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;">turn their eyes away from lectures <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;"> when online learning. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim;"> It is important to remember that the face-to-face education would help students to focus on learning. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-fareast-language: JA;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt; msoansilanguage: EN-US; msobidifontweight: bold; msobidilanguage: AR-SA; msofareastfontfamily: 'MS Mincho'; msofareastlanguage: JA; msofontkerning: 8.0pt; msotabcount: 1;"> <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">In short, learning face to face can <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">have <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> more benefits than studying online. Althoug <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">h m <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> ore and more students are learning <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> at modern <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">online <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> system, the advantage of face to face learning is still much more than online education <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: Gulim; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">. <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-font-weight: bold; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> Online system may give you a chance to input many knowledge, f <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">ace-to-face education <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;"> make students study about <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">not only knowledge, but also <span style="color: black; font-family: 'Times New Roman'; font-size: 9pt; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA; mso-fareast-font-family: 'MS Mincho'; mso-fareast-language: JA; mso-font-kerning: 8.0pt;">attitude to study, relationship to other people, and it give them good surroundings to study.